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16:33:04
splittist
Are you asking for pre-production, production or post-production funding? The fact sheet implies you have to pick one. And do you use the words "originality, formal and design quality, feasibility, a
16:33:04
splittist
high degree of innovation and potential marketability"? (I think you basically do.)
16:37:16
splittist
A suggestion is: have an executive summary (at the beginning) that makes clear, on one page, that this is an application for pre-production funding, that you, the applicant, are a Swiss resident who owns the rights to the assets, and that the project meets those requirements in those terms (pointing to later sections where you justify the originality, etc etc).
16:38:01
splittist
Make it as easy as possible for the person opening the envelope (as it were) to fill in the form and check the boxes to enable you to get to the next stage. (But you know all this.)
16:39:53
Shinmera
I followed my pitch document pretty closely in terms of structure to one a studio handed in some years prior.
16:42:13
splittist
I'll stop giving useless advice then (: (and a 15k ask from a max of 20k doesn't seem unreasonable).
16:42:44
Shinmera
There's an online form you have to fill in where you have to upload CVs, the demo, trailer, etc. So I don't think I need to repeat that info in the doc.
16:43:22
splittist
(except: perhaps 'one-person team', although I'm sure you identify as a man; and do you really want to describe your world as 'dreary'? I know what you mean, but...)
16:48:50
splittist
In fact, do you need the 'set in ...' at all? You've just spent some paragraphs explaining the apocalypse. (And 'post apocalyptic' is already dreary; if it was a 'vibrant and varied p-a env' then that would be worth stating. Just food for thought.
16:48:56
selwyn
my instinct would be to up the requested amount of funding and not worry about appearing unreasonable (though i have little experience with this kind of thing)
16:49:33
Shinmera
splittist: Other feedback suggests removing the first two paragraphs on that page, in which case it would be again :)
16:50:50
Shinmera
selwyn: They are quite strung for funding budget, so I worry that I'd have much more chances with a lower request than with a higher one.
16:53:56
selwyn
my reasoning is: they would not turn down a pitch they like if the amount of requested money was too high/ unrealistic for them
16:54:51
selwyn
on the other hand, if you make a proposal that is quite modest, they are not going to offer you more money than you asked for - even if they themselves might consider it on the low side
16:54:58
splittist
Ah - I liked those bits (: If you put an outline around those paragraphs and give them a different background/text treatment, it would stand out as 'game' text rather than application blurb. And you're nowhere near the 20-page limit (which will not doubt please the jury)
16:55:29
Shinmera
splittist: Hah, the other person said they would have lost interest in the first paragraph!
22:28:20
Shinmera
Well, how to improve it in a way that doesn't just make it cumbersome as hell for the user